My dad and I are in the midst of editing "A Tale", and he instructed me to, please, add more detail!
As I read over Chapter One again, I realized that there isn't much description at all. Even I, the author, don't really know where anybody is standing or what anybody is doing in particular. And that, as we all know, is a very bad thing.
I completely agree with what my cousin said about her own characters, "I feel like they're all speaking in a vacuum". It was as if Elle - my main character - was floating in a foggy meadow with her eyes closed while trying to describe what was going on all around her.
I completely agree with what my cousin said about her own characters, "I feel like they're all speaking in a vacuum". It was as if Elle - my main character - was floating in a foggy meadow with her eyes closed while trying to describe what was going on all around her.
Needless to say (or perhaps not so "needless"), I'm going back and adding in all the juicy details. I never described Elle's employer. Nobody knew what she looked like! But, now they do.
Also, I embellished the opening scene with all kinds of lovely descriptions, so that Elle is no longer floating awkwardly in my metaphorical foggy meadow, but is now surrounded by a huge bustling excitable crowd in the middle of the village square. The scenery is finally becoming tangible. Happy day!
Also, I embellished the opening scene with all kinds of lovely descriptions, so that Elle is no longer floating awkwardly in my metaphorical foggy meadow, but is now surrounded by a huge bustling excitable crowd in the middle of the village square. The scenery is finally becoming tangible. Happy day!
Novel update: Twenty-four more chapters to edit and add descriptions to! 80 days to go!
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